Old films depict outdated Taboo
that now litters daily conversation
why is this acceptable
Newspapers Rape our thoughts
and they stain our eyes
which I believe is their purpose
Bullets fly through the park four blocks away
Children play there! I've watched their soccer games...
Even at my own school they're arrested carrying Firearms
the principal turns her head as kids get High
the science teacher may or may not be having Relations with the students
the math teacher definitely does coke
the english teacher makes the lesbian in my home room feel like Shit
and the history teacher hasn't failed a student in seven years
The neighbor two doors down is a white Supremacist
Acrossed the street they sell drugs and weapons are often seen
(There's an Elementary school across the street as well)
breaking away I go to my computer
only to be forced to use my search engines with precise skill to evade the overflow of undesired Porn
Even watching television passed 11:00pm -
I find myself skipping channels I know hold a surprise Attack
I've written this only to say what's on my mind, Uncensored, No holding back
For We have held back long enough
How many Fucking times do you have to
read it in a newspaper, or blog
or hear about it from CNN or FOX
to understand that it's not a conspiracy
We're going into the shitter Fast
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In an odd sort of cynical way, I like this. It appealed to the social critic in me. I like the message it sends, I believe it also. Just some minor things...
Change acrossed to across. I like this line, it's disorienting, but maybe you can reword "weapons are often seen" differently? It just sounded a little bit awkward.
This line just gave me chills. It holds true for where I live...
I like this poem overall, it's a little depressing, but it holds true in this day and age. A lot of people want to sugarcoat the world, but this poem obviously doesn't. Keep writing!
~Ryllie